Thursday, April 25, 2013

Pulling















Skies drop crystal rain waves, black sheets of reality overdose

Wiper blades alternate - slip slap - blur clear - with a lean forward

Wildflowers, satin rhythm, my images of you draw me home


©Eusebeia Philos 2013

A sijo, written with some freedom,  for dVerse Poets ~ Form for All hosted by Samuel Peralta.

21 comments:

  1. I get a very clear picture with this poem. I can see someone driving home wanting to see a loved one. The last line is really beautiful.

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  2. very cool...i like how the blur of the wipers develop an image beyond the visible...also love the use of onomatopoeia...

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  3. oh nice...i like the focus on sound in the second line and pairing that with the rhythm in the last line....very visual too...i like this one much....

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  4. I can see this.. and the connection to the picture is crystal clear.... Love it....

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  5. How many times have I made that journey down dark lanes with the image of my little family powerful enough to draw me home safely.

    I relate to this so easily but being reminded of the hypnotic movement of those wipers nearly had me nodding off ;-)

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  6. I love that final line--the things that draw us home. Very nice on the sijo.

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  7. You have me right there with you...

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  8. That longing to get home certainly increases in those poor driving conditions.

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  9. I think I just drove through one rainy and bad road ~

    You commented that you couldn't understand this form in my post ~ Basically I used a strict internal count of 14 syllables for the first two lines. The last line completed the maximum count. I used space between phrases, instead of commas to denote the pause ~

    Good to see you trying out this form ~

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  10. Really really like this - the sound effects in the second line are very cool and loved the close. Nice poem - K

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  11. I really like this.

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  12. I can see this through your eyes. And I hear those wiper blades!

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  13. Ah, those wiper blades, like a painter's brush across the palette of the windshield!

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  14. Smart and reflective sijo...with a sweet thought.

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  15. ...you made it so clear for us in your finale line... i can feel the thrill over here... smiles...

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  16. I've made that journey so often; I hate driving when it is dark and raining - one or the other I don't mind - but the thought of being home with those I love does indeed pull me onwards.

    I really enjoyed this, Eusebia

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  17. ah... ran into so much rain this last week driving... you took me back to the uncomfortable time... glad to be home

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  18. Beautiful descriptions...and I know that sense of urgency wanting to get home driving through rain and the intense concentration. Loved that final line!

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  19. A lovely way to use the form. I am fascinated to see how differently we have all approached it.

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  20. Sweet romantic poem -- sanity in the blurred busy life.

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