Saturday, April 27, 2013

coming back by leaving

 
i left around the month of
dog days -
     an afternoon
when the world blew up
survival was
split time
     'tween heart
          AND mind

you left too
a journey to
     never-LAND
places denied you by
    
     suckling infants
     car rides
     low tides
     rising incense &
     daily lessons

i waited
     in orbit
circling in a vacuum
     (absolute zero will freeze your - )
playing out my
con-tin-gen-cies
     to invoke

gravity pulled me
to a place
i never left
     when you
     teleported
     back from that
     far away look

ETA
on schedule


©Eusebeia Philos 2013

Written for dVersePoets ~ Poetics Trip the Poem Fantastic

26 comments:

  1. Nice..I like waiting in the orbit, circle in a vacuum ~ The feeling of separation is poignant and touching here ~ Hope the reunion is special ~

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  2. first, great titling...and an odd bit of wisdom int hat as well...survival being split time between heart and mind...great acknowledgement there as well...the waiting in orbit, vacuum...got to be a rough disconnected feeling too....nice write sir

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  3. I like the idea of gravity pulling you to a place you never left. It expresses to me the feeling of belonging and being rooted! I enjoyed your take!

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  4. Terrific poem - I hope the couple gets together again- sounds like it - but something being scheduled and happening always a bit different - very interesting take. k.

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  5. "circling a vacuum" - that's a fine way to express the sense of absence and longing.

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  6. waiting in orbit, circling in a vacuum until gravity pulls you back...wow...really way cool images in this

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  7. You say so much in these spare lines, circling the vacuum. Beautiful poem.

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  8. Beautiful and wise, good ending teleporting back from the vacuum orbiting.

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  9. A great feeling of being suspended in time as the situation takes its natural course. Excellent write!

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  10. A trip with a difference. Circling like an oldfashioned dance.

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  11. A very interesting and original take on separation..Gravity pulled me to a place I never left..well then,I guess it's home!The way you have captured the confusion is quite brilliant.

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  12. "gravity pulled me to a place i never left" I love this. We are satellites, we think we leave but we cannot truly do so. Nicely done!

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  13. gravity pulled me
    to a place
    i never left...I love this...we think we are leaving but we are mere satellites circling. Nicely done. -Kat/@beingmama

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  14. So very real and yet in another place that we often find ourselves and you have pulled it altogether. Commenting from dVerse.

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  15. This was an amazing journey..I waited in orbit..gravity pulled me..I had to read this twice..nicely done

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  16. I love the last stanza especially, and I know I've been guilty of that teleported faraway look in the past.

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  17. when you
    teleported
    back from that
    far away look

    Similar to something I wrote myself insomuch as, theres a sci fi, computerized feel to parts, but reality there as well.

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  18. A song of distances and gravity, human and celestial, with just enough detail to set off the imagery. Our journeys often seem circular, but the point is to go, I think, not where we end up. I like the delicacy and lack of sentimentality in the emotional content, as well.

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  19. A great word picture of relationships... The ebb and flow, I like the return, and the way you get there.

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  20. It can be hard to find yourself in that outer orbit in relationships, just awaiting a force to pull you back in... loved the way you approached this, excellent poem!

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  21. loved the ETA was on schedule after the long journey

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  22. very cool. Love the variating rhythms within the piece and the variety of styles incorporated within. Excellent read. Thanks

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  23. I see longing and sadness, but also some hope.

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    1. Definitely, Heidi. Hope carries one through seasons of doubt and despair. Its partners are usually Patience and Endurance, though.

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