dog days -
an afternoon
when the world blew up
survival was
split time
'tween heart
AND mind
you left too
a journey to
never-LAND
places denied you by
suckling infants
car rides
low tides
rising incense &
daily lessons
i waited
in orbit
circling in a vacuum
(absolute zero will freeze your - )
playing out my
con-tin-gen-cies
to invoke
gravity pulled me
to a place
i never left
when you
teleported
back from that
far away look
ETA
on schedule
©Eusebeia Philos 2013
Written for dVersePoets ~ Poetics Trip the Poem Fantastic
Nice..I like waiting in the orbit, circle in a vacuum ~ The feeling of separation is poignant and touching here ~ Hope the reunion is special ~
ReplyDeletefirst, great titling...and an odd bit of wisdom int hat as well...survival being split time between heart and mind...great acknowledgement there as well...the waiting in orbit, vacuum...got to be a rough disconnected feeling too....nice write sir
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of gravity pulling you to a place you never left. It expresses to me the feeling of belonging and being rooted! I enjoyed your take!
ReplyDeleteTerrific poem - I hope the couple gets together again- sounds like it - but something being scheduled and happening always a bit different - very interesting take. k.
ReplyDeleteDaydreams can be like that!
ReplyDelete"circling a vacuum" - that's a fine way to express the sense of absence and longing.
ReplyDeletewaiting in orbit, circling in a vacuum until gravity pulls you back...wow...really way cool images in this
ReplyDeleteYou say so much in these spare lines, circling the vacuum. Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and wise, good ending teleporting back from the vacuum orbiting.
ReplyDeleteA great feeling of being suspended in time as the situation takes its natural course. Excellent write!
ReplyDeleteA trip with a difference. Circling like an oldfashioned dance.
ReplyDeleteA very interesting and original take on separation..Gravity pulled me to a place I never left..well then,I guess it's home!The way you have captured the confusion is quite brilliant.
ReplyDelete"gravity pulled me to a place i never left" I love this. We are satellites, we think we leave but we cannot truly do so. Nicely done!
ReplyDeletegravity pulled me
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i never left...I love this...we think we are leaving but we are mere satellites circling. Nicely done. -Kat/@beingmama
So very real and yet in another place that we often find ourselves and you have pulled it altogether. Commenting from dVerse.
ReplyDeleteThis was an amazing journey..I waited in orbit..gravity pulled me..I had to read this twice..nicely done
ReplyDeleteI love the last stanza especially, and I know I've been guilty of that teleported faraway look in the past.
ReplyDeleteVery cool write! Love it!
ReplyDeletewhen you
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back from that
far away look
Similar to something I wrote myself insomuch as, theres a sci fi, computerized feel to parts, but reality there as well.
A song of distances and gravity, human and celestial, with just enough detail to set off the imagery. Our journeys often seem circular, but the point is to go, I think, not where we end up. I like the delicacy and lack of sentimentality in the emotional content, as well.
ReplyDeleteA great word picture of relationships... The ebb and flow, I like the return, and the way you get there.
ReplyDeleteIt can be hard to find yourself in that outer orbit in relationships, just awaiting a force to pull you back in... loved the way you approached this, excellent poem!
ReplyDeleteloved the ETA was on schedule after the long journey
ReplyDeletevery cool. Love the variating rhythms within the piece and the variety of styles incorporated within. Excellent read. Thanks
ReplyDeleteI see longing and sadness, but also some hope.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely, Heidi. Hope carries one through seasons of doubt and despair. Its partners are usually Patience and Endurance, though.
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