Thursday, June 20, 2013

Come To Me

I step, gut tightens.

Dark eyes shift away from me.

Why will she not come to me?


Last night's loving hour,

I gently whispered her name.

Still, she would not come to me.


©Eusebeia Philos 2013

A sedoka written for dVerse Poets ~ Form For All
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11 comments:

  1. Brian MillerJune 20, 2013 at 10:54 PM

    touching second half to this...the gentle whisper of her name...and still she would not come...felt that moment...smiles.

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  2. Cressida de NovaJune 20, 2013 at 11:45 PM

    Heartfelt pain of rejection,beautifully expressed in this sedoku.

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  3. grapelingJune 21, 2013 at 12:37 AM

    Sadness so well evoked. ~ M

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  4. brudbergJune 21, 2013 at 5:12 AM

    This gripped my heart.. a great last stanza of sorrow and loss...

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  5. ScarletJune 21, 2013 at 7:10 AM

    I like the refrain on the 3rd and 6th lines, though the sadness is palpable ~ Beautifully done ~

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  6. Laurie KolpJune 21, 2013 at 8:01 AM

    Aww... so sad.

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  7. SemaphoreJune 21, 2013 at 1:49 PM

    The half-repeated refrain in the third and sixth lines underline the emotionality of this piece. Well-wrought.

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  8. UnknownJune 21, 2013 at 6:18 PM

    Unrequited love...makes me sigh...

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  9. TruedessaJune 21, 2013 at 8:50 PM

    A deep sense of desire in your words..filled with sadness..waiting and wanting..

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  10. AnonymousJune 21, 2013 at 10:29 PM

    I really like the refrain, and like even better how the refrain differs a bit in each tercet. A great piece. -Mike

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  11. stgreenieJune 21, 2013 at 11:06 PM

    Plenty of fish in the sea..Or perhaps she's ust playing hard to get?

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