Thursday, June 20, 2013

Come To Me

I step, gut tightens.

Dark eyes shift away from me.

Why will she not come to me?


Last night's loving hour,

I gently whispered her name.

Still, she would not come to me.


©Eusebeia Philos 2013

A sedoka written for dVerse Poets ~ Form For All

11 comments:

  1. touching second half to this...the gentle whisper of her name...and still she would not come...felt that moment...smiles.

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  2. Heartfelt pain of rejection,beautifully expressed in this sedoku.

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  3. This gripped my heart.. a great last stanza of sorrow and loss...

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  4. I like the refrain on the 3rd and 6th lines, though the sadness is palpable ~ Beautifully done ~

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  5. The half-repeated refrain in the third and sixth lines underline the emotionality of this piece. Well-wrought.

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  6. Unrequited love...makes me sigh...

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  7. A deep sense of desire in your words..filled with sadness..waiting and wanting..

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  8. I really like the refrain, and like even better how the refrain differs a bit in each tercet. A great piece. -Mike

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  9. Plenty of fish in the sea..Or perhaps she's ust playing hard to get?

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